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The Best Places......... 1st in series
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The Best Places......... 1st in series I guess I was getting in Ma's way, cause she told me to git. " Go on. Git going! " was how she put it exact. So that's what I did. I got myself gone. Now, when Ma told me to git, I always figured that she just wanted me gone and gave no mind to where. So I took that as it was alright to go to Scrub's. Ma usually didn't let me go to Scrub's on account of his Dad being dead and his Ma being busy with all those "Uncles" visiting. I told Ma that they were probably just there in mourning, and Ma started to giggle. Then she said "And afternoons and evenings, too! " which made no sense at all. Then she started that giggling again. I hate that. Old ladies ain't supposed to giggle. That just ain't right. So I went to Scrubs an saw him sitting on the front curb eating tar off the road. I tried that once but I tend to swallow it, and it's no fun later, if'n you know what I mean. So Scrubs says " let's go down to the tracks ", cause that's where we're not supposed to go. Them's always the best places. Everyone knows that. Usually we just put pennies on the rail and let the trains squash them good and proper. Heads up only. I'm not sure why, but that's a fact. But this time Scrubs had a whole roll of pennies. I told him that we could get us a hand full of candy with that but he says it don't matter none, cause Jake's will have to take them anyways, squashed or not, as they's legal timber, whatever that means. Sounds about right so we put the roll on that there rail and tie it in place with some willow strips. We knows the 11:15 is about due so we sets down to wait. Soon enough we hear it a coming and Scrubs says " Hot damn! ". Scrubs is always saying " Hot damn ", even when it ain't worth it. But this time I'm kinda excited too and I says " Shit yeah! " and I don't say that for nothing! Well, when that there train hit that roll of pennies, you'd a thought someone was shooting a shotgun at us. Those pennies were flying past us could a killed us for sure. Two of old lady Wilson's windows busted out and one of Mr. Dunn's. Lots of houses got hit in all. That's a fact. Well, we took off running and didn't go back there for three days. Mr. Dunn ain't one to mess with. Learned that lesson when we was little. We never did find most them pennies. Only bout eight in all. I figure if'n we had bought the candy instead, it'd all be ate anyway, so it kinda was worth it in a way. That's what I'm thinking. But still glad they wasn't my pennies. Goodatpoetry2 3/19/2017     |
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ah, yes time out of time. when I;m writing about something tht actually happened, I am more in it. I have specific things tht I am tracking in a way that are central to the idea and that I need to place if it's the other kind of story for me....it takes its own way and I follow, the words come or not and as you, I end up fixing grammar or spelling and sometimes deleting excess. I rarely add. it's a bit like trancing as Stephen king would say....the words take over and they fill the page and you are hard pressed to keep up with them until they stop. You're my resident expert...  Thanks for getting back to me. . 
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ah, yes time out of time. when I;m writing about something tht actually happened, I am more in it. I have specific things tht I am tracking in a way that are central to the idea and that I need to place if it's the other kind of story for me....it takes its own way and I follow, the words come or not and as you, I end up fixing grammar or spelling and sometimes deleting excess. I rarely add. it's a bit like trancing as Stephen king would say....the words take over and they fill the page and you are hard pressed to keep up with them until they stop. You cannot conceive the many without the one.
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Loved it...and I agree with tickles...consider putting up a page or two of your story every few days or once a week....you do have a talent...keep on writing and sharing  But nothing much happens during the first 2/3rds. . It's basically 3 days in a young man's life and he tells you everything he's thinking. . Not unlike Catcher-I-T-R . . But he does have a interesting way of thinking. I dunno... I'm a-thinking.  Thanks. . 
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Loved it...and I agree with tickles...consider putting up a page or two of your story every few days or once a week....you do have a talent...keep on writing and sharing Read RESPECT WE all NEED to do Better and Re Petition to Stop Transsexuals from Using Female Profiles
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if you mean do i know it's done, yes. and do i feel a bit "out of time and space" yes because you were. you went somewhere. sometimes it's done before i'm ready for it to be done. smiles the sentence, "that's what i;m thinking". nearest to the end was perfection. such a clear voice. and that you put it alone. For instance, I had no idea that they were going to the train tracks until Scrubs says " let's go down to the tracks" . I know some of your stories a real life stories, so that would be different. . Bur are your fiction stories mostly thought up before you start? . Not the characters maybe, but the story itself? Sorry if I'm not being clear. . I hardly know what I mean myself sometimes... But thanks again! .
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I am guessing that was the last time you did that one. Great story ty for sharing hugs V Thanks. .
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if you mean do i know it's done, yes. and do i feel a bit "out of time and space" yes because you were. you went somewhere. sometimes it's done before i'm ready for it to be done. smiles the sentence, "that's what i;m thinking". nearest to the end was perfection. such a clear voice. and that you put it alone. You cannot conceive the many without the one.
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I am guessing that was the last time you did that one. Great story ty for sharing hugs V Become a blog watcher sweet_vm
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I like it! Please do continue. You might look at breaking that short story you wrote up into an ongoing post/story type thing. Post a page or so each week or day.   You know how in *catcher in the rye* nothing really happens much... but it's interesting ? That's how that story is for the most part. . Something does happen mid way, but I'm not sure that It'd go over well being broke up too much. But still... I might try it out sometime. . I've thought about it often ever since I've been here. Thanks. .
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I like it! Please do continue. You might look at breaking that short story you wrote up into an ongoing post/story type thing. Post a page or so each week or day. I kinda like this kid... Thanks. .
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I like it! Please do continue. You might look at breaking that short story you wrote up into an ongoing post/story type thing. Post a page or so each week or day. Vive La Difference
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I kind of like the way this turned out. . I might even try to continue with this *no name* kid some more in another post. This came so easy, maybe more of this will, too. Thanks. .
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Just trying something new. Glad you liked it. Thanks. .
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I have a 21 page story ( both sides, I think ) that I wrote in the 80's in two days. . That one came easy, too. I was going to put it here long ago ( in sections ), but figured no one would want to read it. . Long stuff gets boring. I did let a published author that lives in my town read it and he said I should send it to someone as a short story. . It's sort of a *Catcher In The Rye* type story. We loved playing on the tracks. . We used to climb the signal trestles and piss on them as they went under.  Thanks! .
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oh, I forgot t say excellent voice. excellent voice........................... I'm guessing you can tell that I'm *trying* to write stories like you do. . It'll never be *like* yours, or as good, but I'm hoping to find my niche. I started this with just the idea of a Mom telling her kid to leave. . That's all that was in my mind. . But the rest came almost as fast as I could type it. . The only editing I had to do when I was done was for spelling and purposeful misspellings. Does it happen that way for you, too? . After I was done, it really gave me a strange feeling. . 
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oh, I forgot t say excellent voice. excellent voice........................... You cannot conceive the many without the one.
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fuckin A. the tone and the day and the broken windows and running. I was right there man........right there. standing O. ovation.... dude, ovation.  You cannot conceive the many without the one.
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As a kid we would lay right next to the tracks as the trains ran by, scaring the shit out of us. Maybe that's just a *rights of passing* thing for boys. Thanks. .
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As a kid we would lay right next to the tracks as the trains ran by, scaring the shit out of us.
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I bet you two never did that again huh..  great read. Thanks. .
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As a teenager I put pennies on the tracks and it was always ALWAYS heads up!! And I love "hot damn" great tale!!! And they were lucky they didn't get impaled by not using their sense( oops) Thanks. .
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Liked it too! Nice memory. Glad they were not your pennies. And lady Wilson and Mr Dunn, blamed them kids, throwing pennies off them trains!  Thanks. .
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I bet you two never did that again huh.. great read. Seduce the mind and see what a wonderful adventure the body will take you on.. 
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As a teenager I put pennies on the tracks and it was always ALWAYS heads up!! And I love "hot damn" great tale!!! And they were lucky they didn't get impaled by not using their sense( oops) (Virtual Symposium Group) use Virtual Symposium Group
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Liked it too! Nice memory. Glad they were not your pennies. And lady Wilson and Mr Dunn, blamed them kids, throwing pennies off them trains!
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